Just for reference, the grading criteria for this assignment (what constitutes a good assignment) is:

(1) A clear understanding of the industry or sector, the product or service, and the organization itself.

(2) Well structured analysis with insightful findings

(3) Creativity and originality

(4) Indication of careful independent research based on both primary and secondary sources.

What needs to be rewritten is attached as screenshots, and I can give you the link to it if needed.

I have also attached a sample structure.
Thanks! 🙂